Student Example 1.5.9 Response

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Step 3: Write a response in paragraph form that discusses the areas that influence your unique identity. An example response has been included for you in Step 4.

Kelly’s response here:

My name is Kelly Smith and I live in Hanna, Alberta. My mother was born in Durham, England and my dad was born in Saskatchewan. His father was an orphan so we really don’t know where that part of the family line goes to. I probably inherited the connection to my Canadian identity through my father because it was the only focus he had for his identity. My mother’s English background makes me interested in British history. Most of the cultural traditions in our household are a mixture of British and our own inventions which makes for interesting contradictions sometimes. This mixture makes my Canadian identity clear to me because I see myself as Canadian before anything else (especially since Hanna is a small town). History is also passion for me which has led me to travel. I have travelled in Europe, Middle East, South America, and United States as well as around Canada. These experiences have left me with a true appreciation of the diversity of people and the background for cultural growth.

I enjoy sports especially baseball, hockey, and football. For leisure I like to golf as much as I can and get out into the mountains to fly fish.

Step 5: Mark yourself on the Self-Assessment Rubric provided.

Using the example in Step 4 as a guide, use the marking rubric below to circle/highlight the areas where you see your 1.5.9 response, and then give yourself a mark out of 10.

1.5.9-Self-Assessment Rubric	Explanations and Support (6.4/8 marks)	Communication (1.2/2 marks)
Proficient	Explanations are appropriate and purposeful revealing a clear understanding. Support is relevant and appropriate, but may contain some minor errors. 6.4	The writing is clearly organized. Vocabulary is accurate and appropriate. The writing frequently demonstrates effective control of sentence construction, grammar, and mechanics. The occurrence of error is infrequent. 1.6

Kelly’s Self-Assessment

1.5.9 My Identity and Nation: 8 /10

Step 6: Explain the reasons for your mark on the Self-Assessment Rubric. Refer to examples from your written response, and the guiding sections below. Refer to the scoring criteria in Step 5 if you need more information.

For Explanations and Support, I gave myself a _6.4___ out of 8.

The explanations of my identity, nation, and the areas that influence me are (choose 1): thorough/comprehensive/perceptive appropriate/purposeful/clear general/straightforward/acceptable overgeneralized/confused off-track/minimal	Explain your choice by including examples from your 1.5.9 My Identity and Nation response: I think my explanation of how my identity connects to my nation (Canada) is appropriate and clear. I connected to my parents’ backgrounds and cultures, and how my small town makes me feel more Canadian than a nation within Canada. I also included my travels and the impact it has had on me.
The supporting evidence and examples that I have chosen are (choose 1): specific and accurate relevant and appropriate/minor errors relevant but general/may be incomplete superficial/not always relevant incomplete/may contain errors	Explain your choice by including examples from your 1.5.9 My Identity and Nation response: I mentioned specific places I’ve gone to, and how diverse each place was. I know I could have explained our traditions in my house more, or what specifically about history I am interested in.

For Communication, I gave myself a _1.6_ out of 2.

My writing organization is (choose 1): fluent/effectively organized clearly organized generally clear/functionally organized uneven/incomplete but somewhat organized unclear/disorganized	Explain your choice by including examples from your 1.5.9 My Identity and Nation response: I do try and have a focus throughout my writing, but I noticed that my sports/interests section seems to come after my travels, history, and family.
My writing control is (choose 1): confident frequently effective basically control faltering in control lacking in control	Explain your choice by including examples from your 1.5.9 My Identity and Nation response: I think I have some short and long sentences, and overall my structure and how my writing is put together seems effective. I tried to take some risks in my focus and how I stated my ideas.
My vocabulary/errors are (choose 1): precise/effective/errors are rare accurate/appropriate/infrequent errors general/not specific/errors do not impact imprecise/inappropriate/errors impact communication ineffective/incorrect/prevent communication	Explain your choice by including examples from your 1.5.9 My Identity and Nation response: I don’t see any glaring errors. I’m not sure about British versus English background though.